Sunday, April 01, 2007

Deepest, Darkest...

Deep can be either good or bad: deep feelings, deep blue eyes, deep rich baritone, or deep guilt or a deep sink hole. Dark seems to be a bit more negative generally: dark mood, a dark pit, dark as the inside of a goat's stomach, dark wilderness; but dark can also be positive: lost in the desert they longed for the approaching cool of darkness, rich and smooth as dark velvet, dark chocolate (my favorite). However when the superlative form of both words occur together, most of the familiar completion responses are negative, or at least, suggestively ominous.
Deepest, Darkest.... :(most popular responses--in alphabetical order) Africa, fears, forest, secrets.

Overwhelmed by the oppressive darkness,
She suddered with silent sobs,
Pushing away the shadows and her fears.
Isolated by guilt, she struggled with the knowledge
of her sin and of its unforseen ramifications.
Never could she have suspected the involvement
of her sister, her sweet baby sister;
Never have guessed the impact on her best friend.
Now it had all exploded.
Everyone was hurt and no one trusted anyone.
But only she knew it was all her fault.

In that guilty knowledge
Was the deepest darkness
And the sharpest pain.

Would it all finally heal over for the rest
If she kept this bitter secret to herself?
As she bore the guilt, could she also bear the pain?
Oh, what a deep dark pit or cave
She felt herself entrapped in.


Blogger Jone said...

Well done. Ifelt the pain of that poem.

5:57 AM  
Blogger Kay said...

I want to know what the sin was. Nicely done!

12:24 PM  
Blogger Rethabile said...

I guess anyone would want to know what the sin was. What was it?

It's an overwhelming poem and everything it packs conveys that feeling.

I also want to point out that the English language, by attributing the word "black" to both the fearful unknown (black magic, blackmail, a black deed, black Friday, black mood, etc.) AND to things African, made a giant mistake.

Nothing to do with your poem which is well-built and powerful.

2:52 PM  
Blogger Inconsequential said...

interesting snippit :)

sounds like sex to me :)

btw, thankyou for your comment on my SS piece, glad to give you food for thought.

keep up the good writing :)

1:14 AM  
Blogger Inconsequential said...

deepest, darkest...peru
was actually the first thing to pop into my head :)

Paddington Bear came from there :)

1:16 AM  

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